Sitting all alone on my doorstep,
Chatting away with dejection....
As confidence tumbled down the dungeons...
I headed for deeper resentment...
All of a sudden..
Felt a hand on my shoulder blade..
Not a hand...a resolute grip...
I shuddered..but the grip only tightened with time..
paid no heed to the immobilizing pain..
tried to fight with petty indifference...
But..of no avail....
The moment came...
of looking back..
to see the reason that my mind is tired of a thousand screams..
and
to my utter joy...Disbelief...astonishment...
and shock...
It was "time" standing with a smile...
A sheepish smile...
which soon turned menacing
as he introduced me to his son...
memory
The hand that was thrust towards me...
Fragile fingers.....and throbbing blue veins...
Was it a friendly gesture...
Or a deathly approach???
I know not...
Anger lashed out at him...
He was unscathed
Last bout of consciousness I remember...
That sprinkled hope on me...
A blemish...
or
The aura of dull,faded red...
setting the sky ablaze..
Never ever...
I gazed and contemplated..
but in the reflection of the scheming redness in my eyes...
I found silence encrypted in time....
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but in the reflection of the scheming redness in my eyes...
I found silence encrypted in time....
loved these two lines... overall a bit random .. but a good one ....but pls write sumthin pleasant soon mate .... somthin encouraging ..i'd like to see this ... again thoughtful writing as always... tc n God Bless !
a different approach...
n a bit differnt from ur poems concerned with "I"...
its good to think something "bigger" than the "smaller world"...
overall i liked ur approach...keep on the good work...
1. arcane poetry is not cool anymore.
2. to no avail. of no avail??
3. i love pointing out mistakes.
whaaaaaaaaaaaat the f mahn.
its a bit high standar dan me...d thought behind the piece is not very clear to me.
@ ShReDDeR v. 1.0
1. Of no avail is given in The concise Oxford Dictionary of Current English(sixth edition). But I may be wrong
2. My poems may be arcane or esoteric. But I can hardly write 'cool' poems... I'm pretty uncool!!
3. Thanks for dropping in..
@rimz and all others..
really regret writing this one...seems like earned me bad name!!!
anyways this was all about how time interfares with my life..the fluctuating memories...
as a writer I,m still learning.
hope I didn't offend anyone by remaining true to myself!!!
ur trying to fight the invisible force/hand/entity which bothers ur self rite? so u use to no avail..as in with no successful result..but if u cnt find a way out of a situation like a catch 22 u use of no avail..as in u've got no other options left..both are correct, it's just the way u use them.
oxford dictionary?? *faint*
u are pretty cool. just do not make bombastic words sound forced. use them and dnt misuse them.
keep the faith! writing is good!
Absorbing. :)
DN.
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